Please critique this?

Question:don't speak.
your words are just a Blasphemy
they have no mercy for mankind
i wanna die you say
what good is this to you?
you are a cannibal
eating away at your own thoughts
begging for sympathy
penetrating your skin
with jagged objects
Sympathy is your only purpose
Sympathy and Sadness
if you believe to be an outsider
look around you, everyone is doing it
you are not different
Wipe those bitter tears off your face,
Stop your nonsense talk
stand up
and LIVE

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: don't speak.
your words are just a Blasphemy
they have no mercy for mankind
i wanna die you say
what good is this to you?
you are a cannibal
eating away at your own thoughts
begging for sympathy
penetrating your skin
with jagged objects
Sympathy is your only purpose
Sympathy and Sadness
if you believe to be an outsider
look around you, everyone is doing it
you are not different
Wipe those bitter tears off your face,
Stop your nonsense talk
stand up
and LIVE

you are a cannibal
eating away at your own thoughts

I like this line because it is specific and original, although I would get rid of the word "own". It's not needed. The other parts of the poem -- for me anyway -- aren't all that original. You might try this exercise. Get rid of any word in the poem that is unnecessary. IMHO, anyway.

Good except for the word 'blasphemy'. Blasphemy is when you speak out against God..is that what you meant/

stand up and LIVE. be a man! - omg I love it!!!

I like it. It is deep, but not deppressing, which is hard to acomplish.

its beautiful and terrible at the same time..... thats all i can say......(btw thats a good thing)

Uh-oh! Do I sense some hostility against emo-kids?

I think it's quite good.
But it starts sounding more like a rant than a poem towards the end.
Nice work:)

It's good.