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Question:I got bored so i made dis for fun

Everythin is changing so fast
But my feelin hasnt for you
I want to forget everthing
But it isnt working
Whenever I see you
I just want to hold you in my arm
And tell you how much I love you
All I this time I cant believe
Your the one that is missing in my life
The one can make me happy
All I need to see your smile
You dont think it would mater
But it does to me
Your smile would tell everthing
that you happy or not
You know I would be dair
If somthing happen
I will try to do my best to help you
Just to see your smile in your face
In the end of it I would tell you
How much I love you

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I got bored so i made dis for fun

Everythin is changing so fast
But my feelin hasnt for you
I want to forget everthing
But it isnt working
Whenever I see you
I just want to hold you in my arm
And tell you how much I love you
All I this time I cant believe
Your the one that is missing in my life
The one can make me happy
All I need to see your smile
You dont think it would mater
But it does to me
Your smile would tell everthing
that you happy or not
You know I would be dair
If somthing happen
I will try to do my best to help you
Just to see your smile in your face
In the end of it I would tell you
How much I love you

With a little spelling help you've got a good poem there. I guess you spell the way you talk but you need to write the way a poem would be written to make the full impact. Good job though.

That is a great poem. Keep up the good poet work. :)

No, you didn't just make that for fun. You've actually posted that poem three times that I have seen tonight. It is garbage. Please take it away and come back when you know the meaning of poetry.

wish i could write my feelings. takes a creative mind to do that and you have that. its a nice poem.

I'm sorry but that has got to be one of the most insipid "poems" I've ever come across! No literary device is present, no imagery, narrow diction, cliche.. Sorry again but this is my honest opinion:/