I have given birth to a poem!?

Question:Frankenstein

Oh Victor! There was lightning in your eyes that night-
That fateful night you dared to play God.
You labored tirelessly,
Enslaved by your passions.
Don't you realize their can only be one master?
Now everyone must die.

-swoosh

Critiques/ Comments?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Frankenstein

Oh Victor! There was lightning in your eyes that night-
That fateful night you dared to play God.
You labored tirelessly,
Enslaved by your passions.
Don't you realize their can only be one master?
Now everyone must die.

-swoosh

Critiques/ Comments?

It's not inconceivable, I should give you a wide berth. Your logic's impregnable, your words are inscrewtable, but I guess not unbearable. Nevertheless, you used "their" for "there." This clearly is a literary miscarriage, an abortive effort, but I shall belabor the issue no more.
P.S. I like this poem.

How long was the gestation period?

cool but whats it saying

Does goose rhyme with Swoosh?

it was really good but i didn't get the meaning that well maybe expand on the meaning a lil bit more

its interesting and proof to all people that poems DONT have to ryhme! i must show this as proof to my frends... lol.
really tho i lyke it and the fact that its short actually seems to make it more meaningful. im almost sure ppl will tell u to make it longer i dunt think u shud.

frankenstein wasn't real dood.....

doesn't make sense, but with a little work it could be great.

Did you mean 'there' instead of 'their'?

Ah, Shelley! I recall, when I learned that a woman had written that...complete shock! What a tale she wove!

Nice offering! Hats off!

Why must we all die....we just got here?