Poem: Kiss Me in the Shower? Critique?

Question:Kiss me in the night
Kiss me in the day
Kiss me in the shower
Kiss me for one hour
Your kiss is sweet
Nourishing like milk and wheat
Close your eyes and dream
You are floating in a river of roses down stream

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Kiss me in the night
Kiss me in the day
Kiss me in the shower
Kiss me for one hour
Your kiss is sweet
Nourishing like milk and wheat
Close your eyes and dream
You are floating in a river of roses down stream

I can imagine a soft voice whispering in my ear all these words and me blushing and batting my eyelashes happily. I pray you wrote this for me. I am going to believe it and say. I am in love already. Marriage in two weeks. A romantic at heart and a writer. Impressive.

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Its Cute

i like it. i would like to get a poem like that written for/about me.

well in general its good...but if i was you i might change the "kiss me for one hour" to be something like "kiss me for eternity" or something that makes it sound like you want to kiss them forever..not just one hour...

good luck!

its a good poem

i think this is really good. i like the last line.:]

well the repetition is kind a of kewl .but like it ends abruptly leaving you not knowing where to go next. idk maybe its just not my type of poem

This girl is a lucky one. Beautiful.