Poem I wrote what do you think?

Question:I let you go, my only love, Your the one I know, The one God sent to me from up above.
We both knew, this ending would come, But we will make it through, we are still young.
My heart is aching, I know yours is too, Together our hearts are breaking, breaking in two.
I removed you completely, from my life, I took every journal page about you and ripped it up,
I took every picture and cut it up.
I didn't shed one tear, For a moment, I didn't ever care, but then your pictures appeared,
each one sliding to the next, Just what I feared.
Now I care, now Im crying, now I want you near.
But you must only remain a memory, I can't go through this again, You can't go through this again,
we can't go through this again.
I love you, but this is the end.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I let you go, my only love, Your the one I know, The one God sent to me from up above.
We both knew, this ending would come, But we will make it through, we are still young.
My heart is aching, I know yours is too, Together our hearts are breaking, breaking in two.
I removed you completely, from my life, I took every journal page about you and ripped it up,
I took every picture and cut it up.
I didn't shed one tear, For a moment, I didn't ever care, but then your pictures appeared,
each one sliding to the next, Just what I feared.
Now I care, now Im crying, now I want you near.
But you must only remain a memory, I can't go through this again, You can't go through this again,
we can't go through this again.
I love you, but this is the end.

it's unbearable to see you walk away.. but there's no other way but to stay..
life's ahead will be lonely, long and so.. but it still worth a go..
beginning for you as it end for me.. but i know we're both the casualty..
i will see you again but you'll see no tears.. i will keep it inside along with the fears..

over all it's good..I like the mature writing...I can tell it's free writing...you put more of your heart in to it...I figured this because most of the time when we use the rhyming words we stop to think about what to write net...but with the non rhyming I feel that every word just flowed...so that's good...as far as fixing it i think you should practice become more clear about you relationship to the subject...example:I let you go, my only love and this part but we will make it through...you have to be clearer than that...like if yourngoing to continue or end this...at the end you indicated the relationship was over...but the beginnig should lead up to the end...meaning putting something like...you lied...we were to diffrent..you know something to set the ending...and try to practive not being so repetitive...Together our hearts are breaking, breaking in two/I took every picture and cut it up/ can't go through this again, You can't go through this again,
we can't go through this again....i write poetry to sometimes...and your doing good...you can't do bad anyways this is from your heart...good luck

The poem is good enough that you should rewrite carefully -- I'd like to know why the break-up, it is a powerful message.

Your the one I know <--- you're

Its important to spell correctly in poetry because you have a short amount of time and words to create your imagery and vision. If you aren't sure, then check the dictionary for the definitions.

Here's a few:
to -- going forth
too -- also
two -- number
a lot -- alot does not exist -- it is a lazy person's way of writing.
they're -- they are
their -- belonging to
there -- where it is
your -- your shirt
you're -- you are

I'm glad this is just a poem....

I hope you can learn to let go and let God...

The line "The one God sent to be from up above" insinuates that God controls your human desires. He doesn't-You have Free Will.... exercise it and move on..... You are Human, You have the ability to love and love is a boundless thing, just because you've loved once does not inhibit the ability to love again & again & again..... Love has no bounds.

We make choices and live experiences that change our circumstance. Our will is Ours "God gave it to us.... Will yourself to move on!

Some day you will look back on this lovely poem in a completely different way....

Omg i really like that poem!!! it was really good..! especially with what i am going through right now! i loved it so much that is the best poem i have honestly ever heard! i know you are young and i am to im 16 but i can really relate to what you are feeling well its good!