Why dont cage birds Sing? Care to comment on my Poem?

Question:Why don’t cage birds sing?
Unless we teach them, then they might of course
They can no longer feel the wind in their wings
Is it possible for birds to feel remorse?

Why wont cage birds sing?
They have everything they could ever want
I suspect they are feigning
And it is the captors who are being taunt

Then again, it might be simpler than this
Like love confined cant grow
And love defined is love amiss
Love needs to be sought; but there is nowhere to go

Why wont cage birds sing?
Be it Bird or Man it’s a indicator to Health
But for some freedom means everything
And just like love it’s not subject to wealth

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Why don’t cage birds sing?
Unless we teach them, then they might of course
They can no longer feel the wind in their wings
Is it possible for birds to feel remorse?

Why wont cage birds sing?
They have everything they could ever want
I suspect they are feigning
And it is the captors who are being taunt

Then again, it might be simpler than this
Like love confined cant grow
And love defined is love amiss
Love needs to be sought; but there is nowhere to go

Why wont cage birds sing?
Be it Bird or Man it’s a indicator to Health
But for some freedom means everything
And just like love it’s not subject to wealth

I usually don't read answers ahead of my response to a Q, but in this case the details added, prompted me to. I don't think this is a case of plagiarism, simply that we only have so many words and analogies to draw upon in this 3D realm.

This 3D realm is a cage, of sorts, as are our human definitions and practices of love - yes, I used the plural on purpose - definitions, practices. Actually even our human expectations 'cage' alot.

Some caged birds sing, some don't. Some sing for many reasons, some don't for many reasons.

This poem speaks to some reasons why there is the silence of remorse, love abused, and what freedom is to this poet(possibly).

Poetry, like drawings, paintings, music, prose, plays, and sculpture, is so individual, that judging is difficult for me. What resonates with me now, may not later on. What repels me now, may attract me later, and vice versa.

This poem is very clear and expressive and does not diminish anyone else's work.

Good works always mirror other good works. (and so do bad works mirror other bad works)

If I write a song about love in the form of a rose and the seed of a rose lasting throughout the winter to bloom again in the spring then I'll be told that I stole from the song 'The Rose', even if I never heard it before.

In conversations, I'm always asked if I've read this book or that article, as my thinking is along the same lines as this author or that one [whom I've never read or heard of] - so people assume that high-minded thinking only comes out of one or two authorities and everything else is an offshoot of that. Not necessarily and often not correct. But tell that to the masses.

Something can impact me subliminally and then I'm inspired, does that mean I plagiarized, no it does not. There is a fine line between inspiration and plagiarism, but that line does exist. It would be up to the two other authors mentioned to feel that there was plagiarsim and to pursue it legally, not up to us in the grouping of 'audience'.

What matters is what the poet feels and the poet knows the inspiration that the poem is written from - not us.

I offer this suggestion:
Do a 'poor man's patent' on this one - date it, sign it, and mail it to yourself in a manila envelope that has been taped closed and note the poem title and date on the front lower left corner of the envelope - certified mail with signature required.
When you get it back, leave it sealed with the green edges of the certified card (in USA) remaining where they are, over the flap of the manila envelope, and file it away. That way, later on, if anyone plagiarizes your work or accuses you of plagiarizing and you need to appear in court, take the unopened envelope with you and present it to the judge. That is proof admissible in court.

It takes alot to put it into poetry - and it takes alot to withstand critics. That's why I don't publish and very rarely share my work. I don't steal ideas, they are free flowing, but many folks can get the same ideas around the same time, theme, and visual. How many paintings of still life of fruit are there? How many songs of birds in cages and freedom are there? How many poems of being held hostage are there? How many plots to write about are there (only 7)? This 3d realm surely is a cage, of sorts, and so can our human limited definitions of and choices made around love be cages as well, even if not intended to be.

Good work - keep it up.

Thanks for the Q :)

Great you have now finished it- there is nothing worse than a notebook full of unfinished poems!! I love poems that make a person think, like this one. I would like a nice pem for the back of my car!!

NOW-------FREE THOSE BIRDS!!!

But some poets believe that actually they do sing?
Paul Laurence Dunbar:

I know why the caged bird sings, ah me,
When his wing is bruised and his bosom sore,
When he beats his bars and would be free;
It is not a carol of joy or glee,
But a prayer that he sends from his heart's deep core,
But a plea, that upward to Heaven he flings -
I know why the caged bird sings.

Would you sing if you were in a cage?

OMG! WARIOR POET, GIRL!

Thats really great. Have you read the poem, "I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings"?

sounds liek Maya Angelou's poem

BEAUTIFUL

Yeh its okay but I dont agree with the line 'They have everything they could ever want' as they dont they want to be free and to stretch their wings and be birds and fly up in the sky.

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Wow that Maya Angelou poem is beautiful I just looked it up.

I love the original poem "I know Why the Caged Bird Sings" by Maya Angelou.....we all know she is an outstanding poet....and so are you!!

Paul Lawrence Dunbar already has answered this question.http://www.dunbarsite.org/gallery/Sympat...

Maya Angelo attempted to put a more urgent point on the issue with her 'magnum opus' "I know why the caged bird sings" http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/I_Know_Why_...

Your rendition seems to plagarize much of what these two poets already had to say on the subject.

Keep going though. the SECRET to itrepreterping this riddle is to ACTUALLY feel the pain the original author tried to express.

Um, you ripped off Maya Angelou. That is my comment.

Whether or not you "borrowed" this, the notion far beyond Ms. Angelou is felt by many. I hope Simply 6 will look in and respond.

I'll offer 2 "sense" not at all relating to reading your piece.

What hope exists for a bird caged? Have they a sense of being mastered, KEPT, so dependent on another?

Do they submit and resign, conscious perhaps, of bars and a "door" controlled by another?

Might they accept the fate, of confined and perches un-natural, for no other reason than they haven't chosen, but were chosen as an "ornament" by another?

If set free, or escaped by some chance, would they know to fly? To escape? AND to where? Would they return at a point
to that Other?

GROOVY! :-)

That was a good poem, keep writing them.

I think it's a beautiful poem with a deep message.

Being a caged bird I have read, "Why does the Caged Bird Sings", out of curiosity long before you posted this, and must say its a totally different message.

You've put into (other) words, what I've always believed and said (as the good Doc knows), and you affirmed it with your after-words, Love is Freedom, Freedom is love.

- Bird 6 (Better late than never)

P.S. I do keep a song in my heart.