Poem... what do you think?

Question:Here is a poem I wrote, tell me what you guys think!
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By the sea...

As I stand here on this cold, damp day
Looking at the water swish and crash
Little crustacians swimming happily
I wish I was one of them
Flowing free

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Here is a poem I wrote, tell me what you guys think!
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By the sea...

As I stand here on this cold, damp day
Looking at the water swish and crash
Little crustacians swimming happily
I wish I was one of them
Flowing free

For people to know, peoms dont have to be long! They are used to let out feelings. And yours...was amazing. I dont understand people who think that poems have to ryhme and be long and catchy. Thats not what they are. They are used to show emotions in someones own creative way. Yours is outstanding! I love it! I understood your feeling completely.

Im sorry , i think its too short, i feel like its missing a purpose, missing some message, it sounds more like a description.

By the sea:
There are days where the water
is calm others has a rippling affect
I would not want to go swimming in
water when its rough.
I may wade in just to cool my feet.
This was nicely written.

this doesn't rhyme and its not good enough not to rhyme. make it cool!
do verses with it that do rhyme, but repeat this part that could be cool

I love the simple imagery but would love it even more if you could string more of these pearls together into one a bit longer... I begin to be drown into your world of words and then it ends. Though there is such a thing as too long if you are careful you can create a wonderful world and they will flock to see it. Write on, pleas...

EDIT: If you would like to see some of mine...

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?...

go a little longer, the longer the poem the more i look forward to reading it again and again.....it's okay.....