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Position:Home>Poetry> Poetry... You like?Question:Ok, I just got inspired by the weather outside to write this poem, so uh hear it goes! tell me what you think! ______________________________________... Sun Behind the Clouds: I'm hiding in my room, the only light from candle Like the burning flame inside me. I'm hiding from the world, like the sun behind a cloud I'm always here, I'm just always hiding. __________________________________ It's just a short little poem, but I like it ;) Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Ok, I just got inspired by the weather outside to write this poem, so uh hear it goes! tell me what you think! ______________________________________... Sun Behind the Clouds: I'm hiding in my room, the only light from candle Like the burning flame inside me. I'm hiding from the world, like the sun behind a cloud I'm always here, I'm just always hiding. __________________________________ It's just a short little poem, but I like it ;) The fact that you like it makes it worth the world... the ability to express yourself is priceless. I think you have a beauty inside that is trying to be freed onto the page... I can't wait to see more... Very good. At least the bad weather is good for something. Its pretty good, didnt really captivate me but still on a scale of 1 to 10 i would give it a 7. you need to incorporate more words that give more of a picture, to what your saying but still pretty good :) i really like it. it just shows you can take some thing as simple as the sun hiding behind a cloud, and make it into some thing amazing...keep writing! its simple but gets the point across its good that is awesome you have a good talent! good job and keep it up! |