Is this profound?

Question:I wanted you to hold me there,
to pull me back,
to keep me safe.
To hold my hand and tell me it’s all okay.

Gazing through that looking glass,
Leaning on solidness
A foreign feeling,
Sweet as the softly falling rain

Hold me there until the oceans dry
Until the trees turn brown
Until the stars go black.

Eternity in a moment,
Always bitter blessed.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I wanted you to hold me there,
to pull me back,
to keep me safe.
To hold my hand and tell me it’s all okay.

Gazing through that looking glass,
Leaning on solidness
A foreign feeling,
Sweet as the softly falling rain

Hold me there until the oceans dry
Until the trees turn brown
Until the stars go black.

Eternity in a moment,
Always bitter blessed.

Ummm... saddleseat_princess...
I searched in google, and I guess yours is original..
You should keep this poem safely in your notebook. Delete the lines pronto.. Someone might steal this.. It's going to be a loss if someone takes credit for something this good!

Not profound, but very well written with great images. Work on the last line in the first stanza, it did not seem to flow as well. This is a keeper.

My first instinct was to say "If you have to ask, it probably isn't." But just because the theme is universal, and has been dealt with by all of us, that does not preclude profundity. What you say is simply said with dignity and honesty. But that does not guarantee profundity. It is a sweetly sad and utterly charming poem. I hope to see more of your work. Don't worry about profundity, it will mess you up. Just speak to us honestly about your reality and let people answer your question fifty years from now.