Can you help me on my poem?

Question:ok so i have a poem down but i think its a little too "pre-school"
it goes like this

Always holds us up the Earth and never lets go
The Titan that created the stars and constellations
Lost to the Gods
As punishment he had to hold the Earth and the Heavens
Shoulders are sore because of the weight

as u see its his name ATLAS, but the thing is that i dont think its enough... can u please add to it or make it sound better but it would REALLY REALLY be appriciated if you make another one (it does not have to be the same type of poem, actually i prefer it not to be)

THANKS TO ANYONE WHO ANSWERS

and please try to meke it sound like a 8th or 9th grader wrote it please

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: ok so i have a poem down but i think its a little too "pre-school"
it goes like this

Always holds us up the Earth and never lets go
The Titan that created the stars and constellations
Lost to the Gods
As punishment he had to hold the Earth and the Heavens
Shoulders are sore because of the weight

as u see its his name ATLAS, but the thing is that i dont think its enough... can u please add to it or make it sound better but it would REALLY REALLY be appriciated if you make another one (it does not have to be the same type of poem, actually i prefer it not to be)

THANKS TO ANYONE WHO ANSWERS

and please try to meke it sound like a 8th or 9th grader wrote it please

The Earth burdened down with so much pain
Can only support so much more weight
The Titan that lost to the Gods
Carries the burden of having to handle our mistakes
As the world slowly tumbles
Into the darkness of the stars
The Titan
Atlas
Prays finally prays to the Gods
To take some of the weight off
Off his soul

I couldn't come up with anything else off the top of my head. I wasn't sure what you meant when you said make another one... so I just re-worded yours. I hope that's what you wanted....