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Question:Owaisis

Move in me
Brining nourishment to
all
Her hair is cast
To the four corners of
Earth
Fall beneath her gaze
find your death
Take of her
life springs anew
She watches from the
Sky
She caries on her hand
and she cries at
Mothers’ pain
Her tears sooth
the world
New birth
Ancient sight
Healing in her lips
The Owaisis
Sister
Giver

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Owaisis

Move in me
Brining nourishment to
all
Her hair is cast
To the four corners of
Earth
Fall beneath her gaze
find your death
Take of her
life springs anew
She watches from the
Sky
She caries on her hand
and she cries at
Mothers’ pain
Her tears sooth
the world
New birth
Ancient sight
Healing in her lips
The Owaisis
Sister
Giver

New and unique spelling of Oasis. No, I'm not correcting, I'm admiring. Let me admire. It's what I do, and somewhat well. This is beautiful, crying at the mother's pain. " I love your lines "Her tears sooth/ the world." It's been raining a lot recently and everybody dislikes it but I always think of it being tears of happiness that spring is here again, and that humanity is finally starting to realize that its rape has gone too far.

I dont understand why you press enter so much and do a new line. Like 'she watched from the >
sky'.
Why do you do that its not needed you need to work on your layouts and try some grammer and puntuation.

I love it when you talk about falling beneath her gaze! It is a unique way to look ay drowning...

The water spills
and floods my heart
No more I wish
to be torn apart
From all I love
I turn my eyes
The drowning soul
the dampened lies