Do you approve of my poem ?

Question:The green grass smells
So, my bottom repels
But only you can see it.
By the way,
You just got a bit
Of the tin
On your chin

It's my school project. I think it'll go down really well.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The green grass smells
So, my bottom repels
But only you can see it.
By the way,
You just got a bit
Of the tin
On your chin

It's my school project. I think it'll go down really well.

absolutely fantastic! i see a literary career ahead of you. your teacher is gonna be so impressed - are you sure you didn't get any help?

I don't understand what the theme is?

It will certainly go down.

It's fresh and cute for spring, but it needs a title. That is always an important part of writing a poem.

It'll go down alright.

a poem should contain a strong original idea if possible - so readers think they are glad they read it & glad to know your main idea.

if its trivial they dont gain anything - this is trivial!

why not try something with a more serious idea in it!