I have a concussion, so be nice. LOL How is this.?

Question:"etrnally"

Blessed are the souls who bleed,
the sun and moon mock my need.
Blasts of rage,living for the pain,
deep inside my shattered tiny brain.

No more dreams now, only strife,
No more fears it's just my life.
I'm begging you now won't you see,
cleanse my soul and I'll be free.

I saw your face and now your gone,
never again will come the dawn.
Feeding off your hate and pride,
I'm a leech just hanging for a ride.

The wind outside it screams my name,
but when it whispers I'm to blame.
I hear the souls and hear them die,
depressed and impotent, I only sigh.

On the edge I see the damned,
future is now where I stand.
King Millinda calls my name,
So close, I can feel Satan's flame.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "etrnally"

Blessed are the souls who bleed,
the sun and moon mock my need.
Blasts of rage,living for the pain,
deep inside my shattered tiny brain.

No more dreams now, only strife,
No more fears it's just my life.
I'm begging you now won't you see,
cleanse my soul and I'll be free.

I saw your face and now your gone,
never again will come the dawn.
Feeding off your hate and pride,
I'm a leech just hanging for a ride.

The wind outside it screams my name,
but when it whispers I'm to blame.
I hear the souls and hear them die,
depressed and impotent, I only sigh.

On the edge I see the damned,
future is now where I stand.
King Millinda calls my name,
So close, I can feel Satan's flame.

Be aware, have a care
I dissed the Prince.
Ain't been seen since.

P.S. The Board of Directors of the Poetry Corner wishes you a speedy recovery, by a vote of 8 to 3.

wow, amazing work :)

whoa.... creepy...
good...
nice rhyming...
i like it... but its a little.... creepy for me?

Dark and scary. I don`t like to be scared,but I liked the poem.
Very interesting.

scary but great :-o

ok everything is perfect but the Satan's flame makes no sense at the end GOOD JOB

Wow,this is aweome!That concussion did you some good,lol.

Very nice. I like it, even if it is a bit too dark for my taste. That's okay though you're expressing yourself and that's great. Great job!

It's good, Satan's flame makes sense to me. hope you feel ok.

I like it

woah!!! how old are you!! you are such a pro!!

You've created a work of art, just be careful around Satan's flame, I hear it mighty hot.

These are two of the sweetest i have heard from you.Love does your heart good ..I am happy for you .,.