What do you think of this poem and what could be improved?

Question:A Timeless Night and Winged Angels

Another night once more
It is when we shall be restored
For it is when we shall fly
Until the night says goodbye

The stars are our eyes
For our black wings is our prize
We see things untold
For it is when the night unleashes its cold

We soar above the clouds
For when we look down all we see is crowds
Staring, yelling and cursing for our imperfection
For our reflection is perfection

A dark winged man
Cursed before it even began
When the sun rises as the dawn
We all shall be gone

A story untold
For it is time it will unfold
To see the light of dark
Our wings shall be our mark

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: A Timeless Night and Winged Angels

Another night once more
It is when we shall be restored
For it is when we shall fly
Until the night says goodbye

The stars are our eyes
For our black wings is our prize
We see things untold
For it is when the night unleashes its cold

We soar above the clouds
For when we look down all we see is crowds
Staring, yelling and cursing for our imperfection
For our reflection is perfection

A dark winged man
Cursed before it even began
When the sun rises as the dawn
We all shall be gone

A story untold
For it is time it will unfold
To see the light of dark
Our wings shall be our mark

i think this is a very good poem, it shows how althought were asleep , our minds still fly and through tthe universe looking for answers and however many we might find we might still awake in the morning to find our self again in the unending same world were we are critized for who we are in a never ending chain

i think u should make more and get this one published it is really good and i dont think it should be changed one bit

I like it for its message--here are the changes I would make, but use your own judgment:

Another night once more
when we shall be restored
For when we shall fly
The night says goodbye

That is how I edited the first verse--try to take out as many "is" statements as possible--it gives the poem a better flow---good luck.