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Question:a poem i wrote....

The small body shakes from to many pills
Her mind trembles from the thought
She can't think straight, for she is falsley awake
The feeling of weight is to much
Her love for bones overcomes all
She lies to reach perfection
The unheard cries turn into motivation
Her paranoia grows, this can't be found
She is consumed by unwanted thoughts
The hysteria is masked by smiles
Her mind overwhelmed, this can't go on
She says is must, for it is an obsession

-sorry im not one for punctuation-

by the way thanks!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: a poem i wrote....

The small body shakes from to many pills
Her mind trembles from the thought
She can't think straight, for she is falsley awake
The feeling of weight is to much
Her love for bones overcomes all
She lies to reach perfection
The unheard cries turn into motivation
Her paranoia grows, this can't be found
She is consumed by unwanted thoughts
The hysteria is masked by smiles
Her mind overwhelmed, this can't go on
She says is must, for it is an obsession

-sorry im not one for punctuation-

by the way thanks!

Good poem. Too many pills.

That's so good I'm plagerising it

good! but sad

She take drugs and is in a big dark empty room all alone

that what i think when i read this

I love it and think it's incredible! It shows so much inner mind and could probably do very well if you entered it in a contest....you are a great writer!

I like it.
Nice work:)

i like it! it almost resembles someone I know... or knew....... anyway good job! I really think you should anonymously publish it or somethin!