What do you think about this poem? Please COME LOOK!!!!?

Question:Theres only one place
Where I get to escape
Where I don't wanna cry
& everything feels right

Where I can be myself
And be out of this cell
It's my garden of Eden
I wish you could see it

Because when I'm there
Theres no reason to be scared
When I'm there I always smile
People there always go the extra mile

It makes no difference in this world
Whether you love a boy or a girl
People here see with their hearts
They don't judge by body parts

And there is no room for hate
This world is unbelievably great
And no one here has a label
Thats why this world is so stable

Ok well I know how I want the end of this to go I just can't think of the words to use, but what do you think about this? Is it any good do you think it has any potential to be a good poem?
I'll go ahead and tell you this place is in my dreams and I believe this is what heaven will be like. I've been to that world so many times. Everyday I wish I could always be in that world full time.
Thanks for your answers

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Theres only one place
Where I get to escape
Where I don't wanna cry
& everything feels right

Where I can be myself
And be out of this cell
It's my garden of Eden
I wish you could see it

Because when I'm there
Theres no reason to be scared
When I'm there I always smile
People there always go the extra mile

It makes no difference in this world
Whether you love a boy or a girl
People here see with their hearts
They don't judge by body parts

And there is no room for hate
This world is unbelievably great
And no one here has a label
Thats why this world is so stable

Ok well I know how I want the end of this to go I just can't think of the words to use, but what do you think about this? Is it any good do you think it has any potential to be a good poem?
I'll go ahead and tell you this place is in my dreams and I believe this is what heaven will be like. I've been to that world so many times. Everyday I wish I could always be in that world full time.
Thanks for your answers

Well I'm an amateur of a poet. I think you have a talent right there.
I like your poem. It describes something deep and amazing.

Very nice.

Where you talking about Yahoo. Cause here nobody cares who you date either and most ppl think with there hearts.

its good...
transgender lesbian
meaning ur a guy whos a girl
whos a lesbian? im kinda confused...
jus wondering...but the poem was good

excellent job. would like to read the rest. my daughter uses a website called quizilla to post her chapters of her books. people comment and she gets useful feedback. may be something useful for you too.

You seem to have some confusion over There and here.
You switch back and forth.
Other than that, not bad for a beginner, keep working at it, practice makes perfect.