Something that i just wrote during class today, what do you think?

Question:bleeding rose

your face, it still haunts me,
reminding me of that day,
when you came into my life,
and stole my soul away.

I remember when we met,
you took my breath away,
but now all your beauty does,
is make me run away.

you hypnotized me with your lips,
seduceing me into mindlessness,
toying with my emotions,
until all i could think of was your kiss.

every time i wanted more,
i didn't want to leave,
until one night i heard a noise,
a painful pierceing scream.

it took too long to realize,
that the screams were made by me,
you were ripping out my heart,
for your neverending need.

now i'm lying in a casket,
a torn red rose put in my hair,
it's life is bleeding out on me,
like my soul, beyond repair.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: bleeding rose

your face, it still haunts me,
reminding me of that day,
when you came into my life,
and stole my soul away.

I remember when we met,
you took my breath away,
but now all your beauty does,
is make me run away.

you hypnotized me with your lips,
seduceing me into mindlessness,
toying with my emotions,
until all i could think of was your kiss.

every time i wanted more,
i didn't want to leave,
until one night i heard a noise,
a painful pierceing scream.

it took too long to realize,
that the screams were made by me,
you were ripping out my heart,
for your neverending need.

now i'm lying in a casket,
a torn red rose put in my hair,
it's life is bleeding out on me,
like my soul, beyond repair.

dark, but very nice!

i liked the fourth and fifth stanzas...

i write a bunch of poetry and lyrics like that and i love it! its amazing! =D

I think it's pretty good.
Nice:)

i really like it
very good imagery and creativity