Any comments on this poem of mine?

Question:I once wrote this as an egotistical dork, yet reminsicing about some old times. I don't even remember the title. I think it's "Fall Times" or something. I don't use "I" much in my poems.

Fall Times

Fleece of brown tall skin removed.
Arches naked, ankles nude, feet undressed.
Her dog has left.

The door is closed, the walk is done.
Wood floors, we’ve lost the sun and have no shoes.
Woman’s face is now the moon.

Ginger maritime sipping on counter tops
while stories swapped behind the dusk
of kitchen and cognac. Barter lust.

To hear the crack, unclothed her feet do stroll
and trek the wood…cajole her friend,
he comes, descends.

She fed me fearlessly,
Her boots were watching.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I once wrote this as an egotistical dork, yet reminsicing about some old times. I don't even remember the title. I think it's "Fall Times" or something. I don't use "I" much in my poems.

Fall Times

Fleece of brown tall skin removed.
Arches naked, ankles nude, feet undressed.
Her dog has left.

The door is closed, the walk is done.
Wood floors, we’ve lost the sun and have no shoes.
Woman’s face is now the moon.

Ginger maritime sipping on counter tops
while stories swapped behind the dusk
of kitchen and cognac. Barter lust.

To hear the crack, unclothed her feet do stroll
and trek the wood…cajole her friend,
he comes, descends.

She fed me fearlessly,
Her boots were watching.

I have to tell you, whether you were being egotistical or not, that was simply beautiful and so tight. Sweeping imagery and language around every corner.

Thanks, I am going to bed with a good poem in my head.

wow! you sure sound like a professional poet!

That was beautiful!!!!! simply beautiful!!!! I don't know if you are a professional poet, but you sound like one!!!!!! I think you should think of a little better name but other then that i think you should publish it!!!!

descriptive and very nice