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Position:Home>Poetry> What do you think of the poem I wrote last night? [sorry if it sucks I'm a bQuestion:Title: Lonliness Tears and Silver Guns I feel like I'm falling in a black abyss. Not a thing can save me not even your kiss. My heart iis broken. My eyes filled with tears. Nobody loves me. Nobody cares. All I wanted was you to be there. To hold me in your arms. Tell me you cared, but the truth is you'll never be there. Who was I kidding to think that you would? I've been abandoned since childhood. My dad he's beat me. He'd call me names. The kids at school they like to play games. To see who could call me the most horrible of names. They tease. They taunt. They laugh. They jeer. Noone to help me. No place to run. How do I escape their mercilous fun? I got home and reached for the gun. I think to myself this should end their merci Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Title: Lonliness Tears and Silver Guns I feel like I'm falling in a black abyss. Not a thing can save me not even your kiss. My heart iis broken. My eyes filled with tears. Nobody loves me. Nobody cares. All I wanted was you to be there. To hold me in your arms. Tell me you cared, but the truth is you'll never be there. Who was I kidding to think that you would? I've been abandoned since childhood. My dad he's beat me. He'd call me names. The kids at school they like to play games. To see who could call me the most horrible of names. They tease. They taunt. They laugh. They jeer. Noone to help me. No place to run. How do I escape their mercilous fun? I got home and reached for the gun. I think to myself this should end their merci I think it's really good. Poetry is a great way to let out your emotions and thoughts...I'm so sorry to hear that you were abused *hugz*. Just pease don't do anything stupid (like going through with what the end of your poem says)...Remember there's plenty of people who love and care about you.. Wow i really like this poem... i write poetry too...i was beat by mom until i moved out last year i know how you feel and this poem made me cry... =[ where in maine do you live?? hey add me on myspace http://www.myspace.com/sk8rck Report It * You must be logged into Answers to add comments. Sign in or Register. Other Answers (7) |