Courting sorrow?

Question:i cry here in obedience
to the pain i feel in my soul
although my heart is reluctant
i really have lost all control
so i put my trust in the hands
of a fiend of generosity
i look to him awaiting his plans
yearning to be made complete
so i meld myself into his eyes
give way to the winds of joy
cooling the flames of my pride
although this facade of love is just a deploy
a way to shield myself from the hurt
by tip toeing around the wound
although this aqueduct for my phobias is about to burst
this gentle touch has sealed my doom

like having your heart break without the pain
with no worries for tomorrow
all of this solemn happiness i claim
feels like im courting sorrow
and it allows these tears to wash away
this somber crown
i have to keep my head on straight
i cant look down
even though the lightning may strike
and the thunder may pound
i have to keep pressing forward
i cant look back now

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i cry here in obedience
to the pain i feel in my soul
although my heart is reluctant
i really have lost all control
so i put my trust in the hands
of a fiend of generosity
i look to him awaiting his plans
yearning to be made complete
so i meld myself into his eyes
give way to the winds of joy
cooling the flames of my pride
although this facade of love is just a deploy
a way to shield myself from the hurt
by tip toeing around the wound
although this aqueduct for my phobias is about to burst
this gentle touch has sealed my doom

like having your heart break without the pain
with no worries for tomorrow
all of this solemn happiness i claim
feels like im courting sorrow
and it allows these tears to wash away
this somber crown
i have to keep my head on straight
i cant look down
even though the lightning may strike
and the thunder may pound
i have to keep pressing forward
i cant look back now

PoetryNe...'s got it totally right. The descriptions are perfect! And it gives you a sense of knowing what the poem is about or who it's about, but not enough to know exactly, which gives the reader the freedom and flexibility to play around with different ideas. I like that. And I like your poem. Now I look forward to getting those emails saying that your contacts have posted questions, hoping one of em is a poem of yours.

PS - Did you ever think of putting this one to music? It looks like it would make an incredible song

I like it.
It just needs a bit of work.
It is good.
Nice work:)

I like your poem a lot. I loved the similes and metaphors you used, such as "the winds of joy" and "flames of my pride" as well as "of this solemn happiness I claim feels like I'm courting sorrow." The words used to symbolize the pain are fantastic and help the reader feel the emotion you're portraying.