Last one for awhile. Taking a trip. hope you like this.?

Question:"nightmare"

I am just now bleeding, bleeding just for you,
reliving all the pain, all of it that I once knew.
Drowning in a lake, surrounded by red spires,
deep the scars I carry, marked in me by the fires.

On a long dark walk, one cold December night,
Inhaling all the stars, but drowning in my fright.
Did you enjoy all, of your sick and twisted games,
You just walked away, escaping all the blames.

Swallow this the taste, the one you always craved,
wallow in your filth, your life sick and depraved.
I cry a little smile, but not worth my dying for,
Now I've finally come,. the final golden door.

I look out all around, this world just a dream,
traveling to places, I still wake up and scream.
Terror from above, a lovely summer night,
angels all around, swimming in the silver light.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "nightmare"

I am just now bleeding, bleeding just for you,
reliving all the pain, all of it that I once knew.
Drowning in a lake, surrounded by red spires,
deep the scars I carry, marked in me by the fires.

On a long dark walk, one cold December night,
Inhaling all the stars, but drowning in my fright.
Did you enjoy all, of your sick and twisted games,
You just walked away, escaping all the blames.

Swallow this the taste, the one you always craved,
wallow in your filth, your life sick and depraved.
I cry a little smile, but not worth my dying for,
Now I've finally come,. the final golden door.

I look out all around, this world just a dream,
traveling to places, I still wake up and scream.
Terror from above, a lovely summer night,
angels all around, swimming in the silver light.

First verse - excellent, especially the Drowning in a lake, surrounded by red spires (because I have to think, I wonder what he means by that?)
Ditto - inhaling all the stars - wow!
(Leave the s off blames- it sounds unnatural, and I feel only has the s to make a perfect rhyme)
I'm not sure about 'I cry a little smile' - and what the worth dying for relates to.
Now I'm finally here at the final golden door(?)
I like the way you have set out the poem in longer lines it stops the jerky reading that the short lines create.
Thanks for this one.

your should call that one "nausea." Although deep in meaning it comes across a superficially artificial created reality in which you are a victim. Do you have a poem that describes how you've conquered your fears??? keep writing

yeah! different!

Have a good trip, and be careful my friend. Dark poem from the other side of night! Thanks.