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Position:Home>Poetry> For a beginner, are these two poems okay?Question:my teacher gave us a graded assignment, which was writing 2 poems. i wanted to check if these are any good because i really need the good grade..but im beginner so it doesnt have to be really good -Spring is here- The coldness of winter is leaving! The rebirth of spring is coming! We went outside to see the snow There’s no snow anymore! said Joe Yes! We went on to the park To see the great landmark A great big swing Almost every day filled with children screaming It was bare and empty So we left it there, all dead and chintzy The next day I woke up to see my bleary world Only to fall back and had furled Then I bethink, well more like sniffed The moist spring air, my gears I shift To the park! I ran We went on, falling back was Suzanne We went on with great joy No one with coy We felt the breeze, filled with the smell of freshly blooming We ran to the swing, we saw the ice cream man looming We kept on playing all through the day We went on home to fall on the couch and lay Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: my teacher gave us a graded assignment, which was writing 2 poems. i wanted to check if these are any good because i really need the good grade..but im beginner so it doesnt have to be really good -Spring is here- The coldness of winter is leaving! The rebirth of spring is coming! We went outside to see the snow There’s no snow anymore! said Joe Yes! We went on to the park To see the great landmark A great big swing Almost every day filled with children screaming It was bare and empty So we left it there, all dead and chintzy The next day I woke up to see my bleary world Only to fall back and had furled Then I bethink, well more like sniffed The moist spring air, my gears I shift To the park! I ran We went on, falling back was Suzanne We went on with great joy No one with coy We felt the breeze, filled with the smell of freshly blooming We ran to the swing, we saw the ice cream man looming We kept on playing all through the day We went on home to fall on the couch and lay if you rhyme the first two lines the poem rhyme wise would be perfect. an idea i would be The winter cold is going away and in spring winds the trees do sway. dreadful |