Can someone review my Poem for me?

Question:I had to write a poem for a reading project. I was very close to my next door neighbor. She was a somewhat old lady named Melba. She died last year so i wrote a poem about the last time I went in her house. I had to go get her dog and give it to her daughter. Please tell me what you think.
Out Of That Place

It’s cold outside
I go there to find warmth
The candles are still there
Filling the room with a sweet fragrance
There are knitted gloves everywhere
I remember when I would help her hand them out
Very slowly I walk
Being as quiet as if I was going to get a midnight snack
One step after another
I’m almost there
The door creaks open
His white fur looks like it hasn’t been combed in days
He’s standing there
Like nothing’s wrong
But I know better
I know he misses her
I tell him that she will never come back
I gently pet him
Then I say
Come here boy
And he follows me
Out of that place
Forever

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I had to write a poem for a reading project. I was very close to my next door neighbor. She was a somewhat old lady named Melba. She died last year so i wrote a poem about the last time I went in her house. I had to go get her dog and give it to her daughter. Please tell me what you think.
Out Of That Place

It’s cold outside
I go there to find warmth
The candles are still there
Filling the room with a sweet fragrance
There are knitted gloves everywhere
I remember when I would help her hand them out
Very slowly I walk
Being as quiet as if I was going to get a midnight snack
One step after another
I’m almost there
The door creaks open
His white fur looks like it hasn’t been combed in days
He’s standing there
Like nothing’s wrong
But I know better
I know he misses her
I tell him that she will never come back
I gently pet him
Then I say
Come here boy
And he follows me
Out of that place
Forever

It's actually not too bad which comes as a shock compared to the vast majority of poetry that is posted on here.

I like the story and its simplicity, and it has subtle emotional impact. If I were you I'd play around with the form a bit, maybe divide it into stanzas.

For some reason the "midnight snack" line doesn't sit well with me, but I totally understand if it relates to a specific memory. I'd try something like "I tiptoe, careful not to disrupt the eerie silence". Just a suggestion! It has potential though, for sure!

Good, simple and to the point. It is hard to lose a friend.

I'd say it's a pretty good poem...it almost sounds like a woman died...then you are death and you are going to take the woman's husband....if you changed it just right so the words boy, fur, and pet arn't in it...you'd have an even better poem...but it's just a suggestion... :-)

I think it's rather good.I liked the story line' and it kept my interest so it's great.

"Very slowly I walk not wanting to disturb her spirt still lingering there" is a good replacement for the midnight snack line.
........might consider the last 2 lines from 'out of that place forever' to
"out of her life forever."
Also you could use some minor re-structuring so that there are breaks that make it easier to read
such as:

It's cold outside,
I go there to find warmth
The candles are still there;
Filling the room with a sweet fragrance.

Knitted gloves lie everywhere.
I would help her hand them out.
Very slowly I walk, not wanting
To disturb her spirit still lingering there.

One step after another
And I'm almost there,
Creaking the door open, I see his fur;
Looks like he hasn't been combed in days.

Standing there
Like nothing's wrong,
I know better.
I know he misses her.

I tell him she will never come back
And gently pet him.
I say, "Come here boy",
And he follows me out of her life
Forever.

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I have to tell you this is wonderful writing.
It's clean and concise and actually needs very little 'spiffing up' and word changes here and there, which is really saying something what with the usual fare posted here.
Very nicely said and written.