Is this a good poem about war???????

Question:A soldier fights for the U.S. of A
A struggle to rise and begin a new day
He shouldn’t be there, but knows that he must
He’s worried and scared, in God he must trust
He wants to go back, though he knows that he shouldn’t
His friend said don’t leave him ,so he told him he wouldn’t
Then he is struck, his own wedding he‘ll miss
He risked it all, and it ended like this.

A woman is crying, and sitting alone
If he died there and left, then she’d be all alone
She’d have to forget, all the plans they had made.
Of children, and homes, and a white picket fence
He’d left ,said goodbye, she hadn’t heard from him since
There’s still hope she cries out, ‘cause they haven’t come yet
Then she calmed herself down, he wouldn’t want her to fret
Soon enough two strangers will arrive at her door
Telling her how he died, fighting this war.
January 19, 2004

Details:
January 19, 2004 a bomb exploded 3 soldiers dead. 2nd stanza is wife's point of view. Please use constructive criticism.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: A soldier fights for the U.S. of A
A struggle to rise and begin a new day
He shouldn’t be there, but knows that he must
He’s worried and scared, in God he must trust
He wants to go back, though he knows that he shouldn’t
His friend said don’t leave him ,so he told him he wouldn’t
Then he is struck, his own wedding he‘ll miss
He risked it all, and it ended like this.

A woman is crying, and sitting alone
If he died there and left, then she’d be all alone
She’d have to forget, all the plans they had made.
Of children, and homes, and a white picket fence
He’d left ,said goodbye, she hadn’t heard from him since
There’s still hope she cries out, ‘cause they haven’t come yet
Then she calmed herself down, he wouldn’t want her to fret
Soon enough two strangers will arrive at her door
Telling her how he died, fighting this war.
January 19, 2004

Details:
January 19, 2004 a bomb exploded 3 soldiers dead. 2nd stanza is wife's point of view. Please use constructive criticism.

AMAZIN' I CANT THINK OF ANY PEOMS LIKE THESE!! GREAT!, umm is it ok if i use this poem by u? i love it!!! email me even if u say no!!
thnks-did i already say this was amazin'?

That is a awsome poem. You are really good at making poems

love it! You're a very good poet! There are some contest for poetry, you should enter them. You might even win, and at 13! Amazing..

wow...
im also 13 years old...
& i like writin&readin poems
dis poems AWSOME [;
[d3y make mine sound chessy]
hihihi!