Comment on a poem please.?

Question:Drowning
In the mayonnaise
The soggy, moldy bun

Your cauliflower allergy
Your carrot fears
Weakened by the drought

Ignorant as we stroll
Through thick thickets
Of the Black forest

Lacking the powerful gifts
Lying tranquilly abound
Smearing the dirt

Follow me tonight;
Down that dim path
Of pitiful moonlight

Our hearts
Will be aglow
With neon sparks

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Drowning
In the mayonnaise
The soggy, moldy bun

Your cauliflower allergy
Your carrot fears
Weakened by the drought

Ignorant as we stroll
Through thick thickets
Of the Black forest

Lacking the powerful gifts
Lying tranquilly abound
Smearing the dirt

Follow me tonight;
Down that dim path
Of pitiful moonlight

Our hearts
Will be aglow
With neon sparks

I do not remember if this entire poem is the same but I for a certainty remember the neon sparks from times of old.
To be sure, it is quite bad. If a poem is confusing, that is fine. If a poem is a lot of words without purpose, thought or meaning,..I can tell.
The second stanza holds a horrible (and unintentional) breach in reason and logic, you see it? So does the second, though the phrase "thick thickets" so offensive to the silly wee man above is perfectly tolerable. The rest is simply a bore, not disgusting, not interesting.

I don't like it.

The first stanza evokes eating imagery. It is continued in the second two, in the third stanza the repetition of thick thickets is tautological, to be avoided. the final call to the dim path and the artificiality of hearts glowing up shows nature's losing power and artificiality overtaking. The overall impression is not very heartening.