Hows this poem? Any ideas???

Question:yea this is the 4th poem ive posted
do u like it?
any ideas on what i should do to make it better?

cracks in the sidewalk
remind me of my weaknesses,
all over
my imperfections are
layed out for everyone to see
and yet
i do nothing
to hide them

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: yea this is the 4th poem ive posted
do u like it?
any ideas on what i should do to make it better?

cracks in the sidewalk
remind me of my weaknesses,
all over
my imperfections are
layed out for everyone to see
and yet
i do nothing
to hide them

I like the meaning of your poem. I think that its meaning is that even though we all have imperfections, we do nothing to hide them because it makes us who we are. Very nicely written.

it's alright. I would suggest working at it some more, keep writing a lot and make sure to read a lot of poetry.

I like ti a lot, I feel this way myself, so I relate to you.I do think if you take out "all over" it would flow better though. Great job expressing yourself!

you need to work on your rythym and there is very little imagery. But I get what you're idea, what your trying to come across. I like it, but you need to work on ryhmying which makes to poem flow. And there is no imagery I see a sidewalk and that's it. You need more.
(go check out my poem)

this poem is really good and i think the meaning is that although the person has imperfections that weaken them they don't cover it up because it becomes that persons strength to overcome other things. keep those poems comin

i like this alot =]. it's pretty. my opinion is incredibly different than most people's but i love the way it's written with no rhyme scheme. and i like how the wording is so simple but still gets the point across so well =] very very nice.

I think you do have talent. This is a very well written poem and I can see your meaning clearly. Well done.