Ok just wrote this...mind reading it for me...and no im not insane.?

Question:its really rough, but i want to see what yall think and maybe get some oppinions on how to improve....thanks!.....i repeat...im not insane

Giving In

Are these voices normal?
They echo through my mind.
Contorting all previous thought untill
my every action is guided by
twisted images and chaotic promises

They speak to me,
more like command really.
Should I give in? I am getting tired of fighting.
Surely it wont be too bad.
I'm sure that woman deserves what they
have planned for her.
And that man does look guilty.

Come to think of it,
I'm looking forward to giving in.
No desisions, no regret.
Life would be easier that way.
Living in the moment,
forgetting the past

I think i just might
roll out that welcome mat.
Come and get me
my precious little demons.
I will serve and obey.
Where will we go first,
and when is it my turn to die?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: its really rough, but i want to see what yall think and maybe get some oppinions on how to improve....thanks!.....i repeat...im not insane

Giving In

Are these voices normal?
They echo through my mind.
Contorting all previous thought untill
my every action is guided by
twisted images and chaotic promises

They speak to me,
more like command really.
Should I give in? I am getting tired of fighting.
Surely it wont be too bad.
I'm sure that woman deserves what they
have planned for her.
And that man does look guilty.

Come to think of it,
I'm looking forward to giving in.
No desisions, no regret.
Life would be easier that way.
Living in the moment,
forgetting the past

I think i just might
roll out that welcome mat.
Come and get me
my precious little demons.
I will serve and obey.
Where will we go first,
and when is it my turn to die?

well i like it. really, i do.