It only took 5 min to write did i wast my time?

Question:Beyond your smiles
Beyond your tears
Beyond your wasted
childhood years

Beyond the drugs
Beyond the drink
Beyond the deep thoughts
that you think

Beyond the dreams
of a child Whos grown
reality is we are all alone.
Together

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Beyond your smiles
Beyond your tears
Beyond your wasted
childhood years

Beyond the drugs
Beyond the drink
Beyond the deep thoughts
that you think

Beyond the dreams
of a child Whos grown
reality is we are all alone.
Together

Why would that be a waste of time? I'm assuming you wrote it because you are feeling the emotions you have portrayed. If so I'm sure it felt good to get it out into writing. I obviously don't know you but writing is a vice for some people and thats never a waste of time. (BTW it's pretty good)

It is good I mean its simple but its not hard to read or understand. Is it for anything?

the last 2 lines in the second stanza dont make much sense with the rest of the stanza. however 'beyond' all that, i think its really great!! nice job

it's good... but it isn't really ABOUT anything you know... you could be an exelant poet if you wrote about stuff that your passionate about...