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Position:Home>Poetry> Do You Like My Poems Please Tell Me if You Do Also give Me Tips To Improve?Question:Poem number 1~ I feel conceled Inside My thoughts like they're a trap working Hard to Obtain Not Only Me But Everyone and Everything Around me So as I lay In my tainted thoughts Everything fades away Slowly Poem Number 2~ A girl dreams Of fears that torment Her daily Life Misfourtune Waiting to happen A boy dreams of wishes Being fufilled one at a time One person At a time Yet everyone dreams Yes,different dreams but all with meaning Diffuculut to find why but true Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Poem number 1~ I feel conceled Inside My thoughts like they're a trap working Hard to Obtain Not Only Me But Everyone and Everything Around me So as I lay In my tainted thoughts Everything fades away Slowly Poem Number 2~ A girl dreams Of fears that torment Her daily Life Misfourtune Waiting to happen A boy dreams of wishes Being fufilled one at a time One person At a time Yet everyone dreams Yes,different dreams but all with meaning Diffuculut to find why but true I somewhat agree on what the last two said, but I just think they need to be longer. So what if you're younger than 15 and you write your age??? Who cares? I'm a poet too, u don't see me bragging and telling you that your poem sucks because once again beauty is in the eye of the beholder. You don't see them putting poetry up for criticism either, it takes humility and wanting to get better to do that. Just have faith that everyone writes immature when they first start writing because a skill has to be developed. I like your stuff. Keep it up, you'll be great at it later. Just believe in yourself. :) I feel an unfinished feeling to it...fix on that Your poems reflect your age and immaturity. I am sure that you are not older than 15. A good poem would not have revealed this imformation to me. Your poems do not flow and are not poetic in nature. Your words bore the reader. I don′t want to be nasty but this is how I feel. I didn′t enjoy reading your poem. Please keep trying, but spice it up more. Let your words flow, reveal your true feelings. Be expressive. i like them, your very talented but they seem that they need more they seem unfinished to me but other thatn that there pretty good =] well i do not see anything wrong with it Very expressive. I like that. You really let out how you feel. I say........................ Keep it up! :) |