My Holocaust Poem... read??

Question:Rumors reach those poor deaf ears
Dismissing them as lies and fears
Eyes to bloody trenches bound
Death and blame crash all around
Fight the urge to run away
To join the dirst just to decay
They'll come soon, the'll set us free
Not soon enough, blood is all you see
Depression destroys your fight for life
Determination seems such a useless strife
Hold on for me, just one more day
Keep those hateful souls at bay
Loss of faith, loss of hope
Loosen the bind, untie the rope
Longing for the friend you need
I'm here for you follow my lead
I don't know this burden or what you feel
But tell me all you have to reveal
If they come for you today
Whisper in my ear and say:
"Don't pray for me, the mourners prayer
Pray for my life and how I'll fare
God! Give me life and I'll use it well
And of my story, I will tell"
Everywhere you tread, leave your mark
Especially in this hopeless dark
Push through the fog, lift your veil
Open their eyes with your tale
(check for pt. 2)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Rumors reach those poor deaf ears
Dismissing them as lies and fears
Eyes to bloody trenches bound
Death and blame crash all around
Fight the urge to run away
To join the dirst just to decay
They'll come soon, the'll set us free
Not soon enough, blood is all you see
Depression destroys your fight for life
Determination seems such a useless strife
Hold on for me, just one more day
Keep those hateful souls at bay
Loss of faith, loss of hope
Loosen the bind, untie the rope
Longing for the friend you need
I'm here for you follow my lead
I don't know this burden or what you feel
But tell me all you have to reveal
If they come for you today
Whisper in my ear and say:
"Don't pray for me, the mourners prayer
Pray for my life and how I'll fare
God! Give me life and I'll use it well
And of my story, I will tell"
Everywhere you tread, leave your mark
Especially in this hopeless dark
Push through the fog, lift your veil
Open their eyes with your tale
(check for pt. 2)

nice job! i wish i was good at poetry