"A Lost Love"?

Question:" A Lost Love"

She feels the warm sun on her skin.
She closes her eyes,lifts her head up
and takes it all in.
The feeling of comfort she never had.
The love she never could feel, making her sad.
The harsh words she never could understand.
Why?
Why so much hate?
This is no man's land.
She was missing something.
Something deep.
Was it something she had but couldn't keep?
Did she have the chance for happiness, but was too stupid and blind?
It was someone she lost, she'd try desperately to find.
She let him go like a dove set free.
While he thought to himself, without her what would i be?
They needed each other like the flower needs water.
Without water, the flower would slowly die.
It wouldn't be the freedom she thought she had given the dove.
This time she must go with all of her heart to find this lost love.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: " A Lost Love"

She feels the warm sun on her skin.
She closes her eyes,lifts her head up
and takes it all in.
The feeling of comfort she never had.
The love she never could feel, making her sad.
The harsh words she never could understand.
Why?
Why so much hate?
This is no man's land.
She was missing something.
Something deep.
Was it something she had but couldn't keep?
Did she have the chance for happiness, but was too stupid and blind?
It was someone she lost, she'd try desperately to find.
She let him go like a dove set free.
While he thought to himself, without her what would i be?
They needed each other like the flower needs water.
Without water, the flower would slowly die.
It wouldn't be the freedom she thought she had given the dove.
This time she must go with all of her heart to find this lost love.

Not bad. In fact, pretty darn good! I really like the theme and the context. Poetry is a device with which one can express their heart and soul. You have done that very well.
If I may offer a suggestion, do not use full sentences as a verse. This will help with the flow of whatever poetic scheme you chose.
For example, the 2nd & 3rd verse would flow better if it was made into verses 2,3, &4. Such as:
She closes her eyes
Lifts her head (delete the word "up")
And takes it all in

Go from there. It is not my intention to be demeaning or discouraging. What you have written is very good. Keep it up. When the mood strikes, put pen to paper and just let it flow.

this is a beautiful poem

it's beautiful!

your poem is numbingly beautiful. =]sarah