Poem i'm writing for my friend, please help me edit and comment?

Question:you whisper my beauty in my ear
say you'll never hurt me
that you'll love me forever

you hurt me everyday
you tear a piece off my heart
everytime i stay

soon they'll be nothing left
nothing but my empty shell
and the echos of my beauty

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: you whisper my beauty in my ear
say you'll never hurt me
that you'll love me forever

you hurt me everyday
you tear a piece off my heart
everytime i stay

soon they'll be nothing left
nothing but my empty shell
and the echos of my beauty

It's beautiful. I'd like to know what the hurt is -- perhaps one more stanza with that kind of information, in your lovely poetic way.

perfect. you asked this question before. it give great imagery. checked your other question that you posted, i answered that one instead.

thats great you should add something like (not hteses words) i dont know if i really belive you,i'd do anything for you and crap like that