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Position:Home>Poetry> (PG) A poem about an adult theme. Suggestions please, comment, opinion?Question:Mania of Masturbation Her smile lights your senses Your fingers trip slightly Frosted, her look so trysting Forlorn, so trembling Amore, il mio amore You feel the sureness so relished Entangled in her kiss you watch her fingers squeeze fluffy soft white bosoms smiles of tepid desires Amore, per amore You grip the shaft frantically Best for grease Lids flickering, fluttering, inviting Sounds frustrating your fingers Her slit scores a blush tongues slithering crushing tasting amore, con affetto you flush in a writhing arch She delightfully turns and arcs backward Her behind slick and fleshed amore, amore infinito Fire burns your soul Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Mania of Masturbation Her smile lights your senses Your fingers trip slightly Frosted, her look so trysting Forlorn, so trembling Amore, il mio amore You feel the sureness so relished Entangled in her kiss you watch her fingers squeeze fluffy soft white bosoms smiles of tepid desires Amore, per amore You grip the shaft frantically Best for grease Lids flickering, fluttering, inviting Sounds frustrating your fingers Her slit scores a blush tongues slithering crushing tasting amore, con affetto you flush in a writhing arch She delightfully turns and arcs backward Her behind slick and fleshed amore, amore infinito Fire burns your soul a great poem...with well organized thoughts about something we all like and love, but too often are embarassed or uncomfortable talking about...hooo ahhh! Pretty good. Only thing I don't like is the word "shaft" It takes the feeling from poetic to pornagraphic. It just doesn't seem to fit. Maybe find a word more metaphoric. OH PUKE! What a sick depraved disguisting poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!... Like the theme, not really a poem so much as a wet dream though. Very vivid. Sometimes the in your face with taste is the best way to present which I think you did with this. Shaft and slit are extremely strong words. A different word choice perhaps? Overall, I like. |