I wrote a poem do you like it?

Question:I saw the light
I saw the man
I saw the end
I saw the beginning
I saw the smile
I saw his eyes
I saw everything I wanted
I saw everything that ended
I saw you
You saw me
but you didnt see me
I cried
you laughed
I miss you like that

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I saw the light
I saw the man
I saw the end
I saw the beginning
I saw the smile
I saw his eyes
I saw everything I wanted
I saw everything that ended
I saw you
You saw me
but you didnt see me
I cried
you laughed
I miss you like that

Yes I liked it.But don't let anyone tell you otherwise.It has very good emotions.

i like your poem

F_U_C_K Jesus

ALL HAIL SATAN THE KING

Ya! I can't write poems at all so it's cool that you can!!!

no not at all im sorry i just think its a little boring

awwwww it's simple and yet it has a lot of feeling. It inspires me to write something.

nice.i like the begining most:
i saw the light.
i saw the man.
i saw the end.
i saw the beginning.
i saw the smile.
i saw the eyes.

great job!
thats nice work.

i saw the post
i saw your question
i saw poem
i saw you suck at poems
you didn't see me
i wish i didn't see you

honestly i write poetry and i didn't really like yours

here try not to use "i saw" too many times

than take out

i saw you
you saw me
but you didn't see me

it makes no sense

try
i saw you
you smiled at me
i turned away into the the deep echo of the sea
you held me tight
your eyes so bright
bleeding throught my chest
the end of our relationship

and try changing the whole i saw parts
they have nothing to do with anything
i hope i helped

oh and remember not all poems have to rhyme
only some

very kool.