How is this poem (not done)?

Question:Is this poem good? and any suggestions to make this poem better?

I often wonder if im doing enough
To make you laugh, smile, even for awhile
Before you came in my life it was miserable and incomplete
Now you're here, you can feel my heart beat
All true feelings come from the heart
Our bond is strong, no one can take us apart
The love we built is so unique
We find a way to express it everyday of the week

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Is this poem good? and any suggestions to make this poem better?

I often wonder if im doing enough
To make you laugh, smile, even for awhile
Before you came in my life it was miserable and incomplete
Now you're here, you can feel my heart beat
All true feelings come from the heart
Our bond is strong, no one can take us apart
The love we built is so unique
We find a way to express it everyday of the week

You have a good start, but you do need to do some editing:

Capitalize "I" throughout because you are using capital letters in the poem. You do not need to start each line with a capital letter -- it is archaic and passe -- let if flow as the poem flows. You can see that the flow is rough, but you are writing about love that is unique and smooth -- so you need to straighten the meter to even it out. Try to replace the redundant words with others, give yourself the challenge of not repeating a single noun, adjective, or adverb in the poem. It will tighten it and give you a new perspective.
Since you use "love" over and over, I really want to see what you can do to change this until you use the word only once in the beginning or maybe twice, once in the end.

I often wonder if I'm doing enough (11)
To make you laugh, smile, even for awhile (10)
Before you came into my life (8)
it was miserable and incomplete (9)
Now you're here, you can feel my heart beat (9)
All true feelings come from the heart (8)
Our bond is strong, no one can take us apart (11)
The love we built is so unique (8)
We find a way to express it everyday of the week (14)
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i dont like the last sentance

im not hating on your work but it has been done so many times before. the pace, the meaning, the words all seem to common. change some words up and put your true feelings on paper, no matter who understands what your writing. write for you and not for what you think people will understand

u can create a still good poem

It's ok.
You could work on the structure, the meter some.
Maybe use some different discriptive words would be good.
Nice:)
Happy writing:)

I think it is a nice start, you just need to be a little more descriptive...while I am reading the poem I want to feel what you are feeling, see what you are seeing... A really good poem makes the reader's heart swell with love or break with pain, it puts you in the moment.

Go to thesaurus.com and play with some of the words to make them have more impact.

But overall, a good start :)

It seems more like a letter than a poem

is it enough I wonder
to make you laugh ,smile
before you there was misery
I was incomplete......

just an example, make it more poetic