A foursome of Haiku for someone special. How do you like them.?

Question:"the four seasons"

Summers wrath is heat
Teenage girls, heavenly treat
Night rescues the day

October loves me
Orange and rust colored leaves
Seasons are my lust

Winter goes too fast
Done before it even starts
Snow goes on it's way

Spring is fireworks
Reds and greens and daffodils,
Never go away.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "the four seasons"

Summers wrath is heat
Teenage girls, heavenly treat
Night rescues the day

October loves me
Orange and rust colored leaves
Seasons are my lust

Winter goes too fast
Done before it even starts
Snow goes on it's way

Spring is fireworks
Reds and greens and daffodils,
Never go away.

I like. You might have to address the title since you used October instead of fall.

I like em.
You are talented.
Nice work:)

If this is for someone special, then I would recommend a different kind of poem, possibly a free verse. Also, if this is for someone special, then you should make it more about that person and less about the seasons. Yes, the seasons are beautiful, but the only "someone special" line was "Teenage girls, heavenly treat" in the first stanza. A free verse is a much better choice for a romantic poem to someone you care about.

i like it, it's really good :)

it isn't that good. in fact they might take offense to teenage girls heavenly treat.

im impressed! (:

but if this was supposed to be for a lover, ("someone special") this wouldn't be very appropriate...

"teenage girls, heavenly treat"
and "seasons are my lust"
are kind of ominous lines....

its not really basho is it?
it also, and i dont want to sound like a tourist, doesn't make that much sense.
Of course, the intended recipient may feel differently.
There may be lots of referances to things you have said to eachother in there, that i cannot see.
anyways, i do really like the "night rescues day" line. So resonant of a balmy summer night after the cruel heat of the day.
but thats about it.

These are really good haikus, however if your 'someone special' is a girlfriend, then I don't think it says anything too profound. The haikus are just talking about seasons...

I like the 4 seasons. I felt and saw each season. I especially love Spring.

Well, since I didn't see anywhere on there that they were for a special "girlfriend"...they may be for a male friend, or even just a female friend who likes the seasons. Every poem doesn't have to be for a girl/boy friend. So now that I am on everyone's thumbs down list. Good haiku's Steve. I hope your "special" friend enjoys them, I did. Thank you.

First two I like - I think because each has a a last line which is ambiguous.....you read it and start thinking, mm I wonder what that means?
But 'snow goes on its way', and 'never go a way' are banal statements, they lack that certain something.
(I do like the line Reds and greens and daffodils though.