What do you think of my poem? "twilight silence"?

Question:i will be the silence
in the twinkling of the night
when the world is ablaze
with all of its madness and its craze
i will claim the darkness
sieze it by the heart
i will disperse the flagrant
nothing will bring you any harm
i will hold you so close to me
that you can here my heart as it beats
and the gentle candence that it plays
will send you fast asleep
touch me softly
in my spirit
pray me through the harsh times
kiss me so gently
i can hardly feel it
when your love begins to elope with mine
and i will be your laughter
when you begin to cry
and when your heart is breaking
i will give you a piece of mine
when you feel down on your luck
i will be there to lift you up
and bring a smile on your face
although life has failed you in its disgrace
you have found a love you can call your own
it seems so hard to believe
an element to which you can claim a home
and im happy you found it in me

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i will be the silence
in the twinkling of the night
when the world is ablaze
with all of its madness and its craze
i will claim the darkness
sieze it by the heart
i will disperse the flagrant
nothing will bring you any harm
i will hold you so close to me
that you can here my heart as it beats
and the gentle candence that it plays
will send you fast asleep
touch me softly
in my spirit
pray me through the harsh times
kiss me so gently
i can hardly feel it
when your love begins to elope with mine
and i will be your laughter
when you begin to cry
and when your heart is breaking
i will give you a piece of mine
when you feel down on your luck
i will be there to lift you up
and bring a smile on your face
although life has failed you in its disgrace
you have found a love you can call your own
it seems so hard to believe
an element to which you can claim a home
and im happy you found it in me

Well, some parts of this didn't make alot of sense but it sounds fabulous. Here should be hear, pray me through harsh times? Pray with me through times sounds better. Flagrant? Fragrant? There is no such word as flagrant. I'm sorry to tear it apart but it's just to help you make it better.

amazing. have you ever thought of writing songs?

well.....

very nice! I am a teacher and you get an A! Keep up the good work!

gosh. this poem is great! keep up the good job! i really like it!

I really like it , i think it flows well
To me it's deep and creative.
It's dark yet romantic and sweet, it demonstrates your love and courage to protect this person you love.
It's really good and I wouldn't change anything except you made a mistake that you may have already fixed...

The mistake -> that you can here (hear) my heart as it beats

Bravo! Very good! even though some parts didnt make sense. Still I think you have talent! keep working. Of course, everyone will say its nice.

Sweet bitter collection.

That was pretty well written. I really enjoyed the first few lines.

Excellent writing. I am very impressed. Bravo. Such great talent displayed within this written piece of art.

thats a great poem wish i could write that good

cooooooooooooooooooooool

Wow, that is good.
I think you could clean some of it just a bit.
But all in all it's good.
Nice work:)