Tell me what u think bout this poem?

Question:can no one see that the world is dieing
that it is suffering in pain
and it is crying

can no one see what we are doing to nature
we chop and cut
then relize what we did later

when the world is gone
and people see what they did
they will say "do you remember that poem wrote by that kid

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: can no one see that the world is dieing
that it is suffering in pain
and it is crying

can no one see what we are doing to nature
we chop and cut
then relize what we did later

when the world is gone
and people see what they did
they will say "do you remember that poem wrote by that kid

The message is good and I think to tackle the concern internationally the solution has to be simple.
I suggest you simplify your poem, be succint with using as little words as possible.
For instance
"and it is" crying (the quoted doesn't flow well )
Overall, nice idea in the end.

Good poem making us aware of our future, the last line is quie good.

itz gud. i like da way u ryhmed it and used it wit real life things. and if dis gets ut robably ey wuld remmeber dis poem

It's dying not dieing. Realize, not relize but it's a good poem. You could add some more things to make it more visually devastating and it would be better.