Is my poem any good at all?

Question:Is it okay that I put a couple of rhymes in the first 2 verses but not in the last ones?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Is it okay that I put a couple of rhymes in the first 2 verses but not in the last ones?

I like this piece. It flows like butter and you have something to say and you say it so wonderfully, Sunshine. I think this is beautifully crafted. The structure and the flow are exquisite.
Great Job!

On a Personal Note: Expectations are nothing more than someone else living through us. If you accept it, you only lose yourself.

i think it is really nice!

I think it's quite good, actually. You need to make the rhymes consistent, but the meaning you convey is beautiful. :]

Very good poem.

I understand what it is saying, I hope you don't go with the obligations (someone else's dreams) and go with your own--it's your life, no one else's. Make wise choices in life, you have dreams for a reason.

I like it

You have a lot of great imagery in this poem and enough brevity so that it didn't feel bogged down. Your style is strictly free verse but the rhymes made it interesting. No problems there. If you were going for a solid structure, there would have been issues, but this way, fine and dandy. Yes, I would rate your poem as definitely good, and with more work, as everything, a potential to be even better. Blessed Be.

wow well , did u write that. i dont think its aproblem that only 2 lines rhyme, thats ok. its brilliant, and has mass appeal , i mean most everyone can relate with it, even if the subjects a girl. great poem!

It could use a little fine tuning but overall it's good stuff.

OK by me.

i think its decent. but you know poems don't have to rhyme. i mean it helps(sometimes, not all the time). but just go with the flow. & try not to stop & think of what to write, just let it come to you.

It all depend on your intention. It doesn't always have to rhyme all through out, unless the assignment or intention is to rhyme.

I like how you wrote your poetry. I like the rhythm of it. The last verse has an affect to how you wrote it. As I was reading it, all through the first 4 verses, you gave this nice imageries and subtle emotion. At the last verse the emotion has that crescendo feeling to it. It made me pay attention more to what you are saying.
As far as rhyming, the mixture of it so subltle that it didn't distract how I read your poem. I don't see anything wrong with it. Good job!! Almost reminds me of Platt.

Honor and duty before all else. You`ve expressed it very well, I love it.

It's HIGHLY starrable! :-)

A great poem! THis is so true with so many folks. Those who succeed do not listen to the naysayers though.

What a dilemma. It comes out very clear. I like it. The nice thing about poetry is that there are no rules