Will you critique my poem?

Question:I am just learning, so I am iffy with meter and the certain styles yet....so please don't be too harsh, but let me know what needs to be worked on.

Falling deeper into this hole
You created inside of me.
Fighting for something to hold onto.
Yet wishing to be free.

Noticing my fingers slipping,
You pull me up for air.
Only to push me back down again,
When you decide to no longer care.

I will probably add more to it, this is just a beginning for now....or should I leave it as is?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I am just learning, so I am iffy with meter and the certain styles yet....so please don't be too harsh, but let me know what needs to be worked on.

Falling deeper into this hole
You created inside of me.
Fighting for something to hold onto.
Yet wishing to be free.

Noticing my fingers slipping,
You pull me up for air.
Only to push me back down again,
When you decide to no longer care.

I will probably add more to it, this is just a beginning for now....or should I leave it as is?

I don't know about the length. Some might say you need to add more to it, but I like it as it is. Poetry is best when trimmed down, cut short (I'm not very good at this), and bare minimum to say what you need to say. Some of your rhythm is a little off. I'd try something to this effect.

Falling deeper into this hole,
you created inside of me;
fighting for something to hold to,
yet wishing that I was free.

You notice my fingers slipping,
and pull me up for air...
only to push me back down again,
when you decide not to care.

I'm not trying to rewrite you and if you hate it, that's fine. If you like it, however, feel free to use it as you choose. Best of luck, based on this, I'm excited to hear more.

This is quite good.
I think you could do either, keep it or add to it.
Very nice work:)

Critique?
I've none
to offer,
but this one bit
I proffer,

let no opnion
get you down,
and no bad comment suffer.

In order for talent to grow, take that which applies, leave the rest behind. You will come along, I see it, welcome to the road less traveled. Ever Yours,

Nicely put. I am not sure you need to add to it, that will be your choice. It could very well be finished just as it sits. Bravo.

Meter and styles is not as important with substance so, don't worry about it. As far as how long it should be... "A poem is never done, only abadoned," Paul Valery.
I think is a good poem. You have that abusive relationship that leave the ending to the audience reading it, if it finished as is. It's like you want some sort of resolution, but the real world is not always like that, and makes me just want to hear more you what you have to write about it. Good job!!! Keep on writing, and just purge all those thoughts and emotion.