Critique my poem please?It`s called "seven days"?

Question:Monday,
Tuesday,
Wednesday,
Thursday,
Friday,
Saturday,
and Sunday.

Please dont be cruel...i have a mental age of 9.
Thank you.
Thank you so much.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Monday,
Tuesday,
Wednesday,
Thursday,
Friday,
Saturday,
and Sunday.

Please dont be cruel...i have a mental age of 9.
Thank you.
Thank you so much.

What about nights? Can't you do that? x

edit-thanks Prod...I'm well known round my area ;)

it rhymed

i think

right - don't quit your day job

omg u should sooo get signed!! not........

so wat its the days of the week big woop, be more creative

Well thats more like a 5 year old. It was horrible.

It very hard to think of a poem, with all 7 lines rhyming.

Good effort!!!

I think it's very good in the sense that it's very simple and strait to the point, but what might make it better is that you could add in a few verses that explain what you do on those days of the week, or how those days make you feel.

You demonstrate the abundant dexterity for poetic meter, such as would entrance the greatest concupiscent adherent to the most pulchritudinously mellifluous cleansing delights of the pellucidest Shakespearean soliloquy.

I have the mental age of a twenty three year old, but unfortunately I live in a box under the bed and am terrified by my own gipsy jenny.

I agree with Bellingshausen.....I think.

Very WEEK! But never mind you'll soon be ten.

The pentametre is issipated, as are the couplets.
I think I have seen this before in a poetry compilation, can this be plagiarism? We should be told.

I know the days of the week. Can you tell me what I'm supposed to take from this? Nine year olds write much better stuff and by the way, if you did have a mental age of nine, you wouldn't understand the concept.

Not your best work it has to be said..x

Yes i can see your mental age shining through there..9 you say, sure it's not 9 months?

*looks up* I'm well known round smiths area too..x

Yeah like that wasn't your plan all along...i'm just thankful your to upset to visit the old folks home..those poor poor pensioners. x

maybe if you put in more WORDs...
yeea that would help
or read some POE!!

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ohh yes a telitubbie
nooo u insufferable fake know-it-all
Edgar Allan Poe

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obviously your not such a smartass if you cant recognize sarcasm when you see it.

At the cognitive age of 9, you already know the days of the week.....Harvard, Yale....the world is your haven

Tecnecly, this does rhyme. every word ends with day. add more and ask later

Try, try and keep trying !!! You WILL get there eventually with your determination and peoples reactions you WILL come to realise you DO need more practice. Good Luck. Good effort so far.

It was a good joke once, but now it's wearing a trifle thin.
Give it a rest, eh?