Poem I just wrote what do you think? "Lifes Lie"?

Question:Hello lifes lie
Look me in the eyes!
Do you see me cry? Can you let me Die?
Let these tears dry? Let me fly way up high in the beautiful sky?

"No" you say, but why??!!!!!

I gave this life a try!!!

You deny me, Why????

Hello?
Lifes lie?
Don't be shy..
Are you going to reply?
Ok, Fine! Bye!

(sigh)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Hello lifes lie
Look me in the eyes!
Do you see me cry? Can you let me Die?
Let these tears dry? Let me fly way up high in the beautiful sky?

"No" you say, but why??!!!!!

I gave this life a try!!!

You deny me, Why????

Hello?
Lifes lie?
Don't be shy..
Are you going to reply?
Ok, Fine! Bye!

(sigh)

It's too much rhyming for my taste.
But if you like it that's what matters.
Nice:)

crappy, crappy, why why why.
no explanation, ok goodbye.

okay now, rhyming is cool but that was ridiculous. after a while it just get's annoying with it rhyming THAT much. my advice is to change it up some. have fun with that!

Oh lordy, my my my;
You Should give it another try.