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Question:I am broken
a china doll smashed against my mirror
when i see the shoemark on the poor girls shoulder
and imprint in the sand

I am lost
an abandoned child wandering the city
your bruises begining to show dark as his heart
the heart that we thought loved before, a lie to our faces

I am betrayed
a thousand knives to the heart, a never ending rain of acid
the yellow not pads of the cops reflecting artifical happiness

I am appalled
repulsed by the actions of those who are no longer family
disgusted by those who feel they were right, they were just, who were lied to
nauseated by the threats to my mother, by the names, by the false accusations

I am destroyed
my worst nightmare unfolding, a flower never meant to bloom
a lightning strike, foreboding, warry of what to come
thrown into a cold, frozen, fiery pit of hell of Earth

~sam l.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I am broken
a china doll smashed against my mirror
when i see the shoemark on the poor girls shoulder
and imprint in the sand

I am lost
an abandoned child wandering the city
your bruises begining to show dark as his heart
the heart that we thought loved before, a lie to our faces

I am betrayed
a thousand knives to the heart, a never ending rain of acid
the yellow not pads of the cops reflecting artifical happiness

I am appalled
repulsed by the actions of those who are no longer family
disgusted by those who feel they were right, they were just, who were lied to
nauseated by the threats to my mother, by the names, by the false accusations

I am destroyed
my worst nightmare unfolding, a flower never meant to bloom
a lightning strike, foreboding, warry of what to come
thrown into a cold, frozen, fiery pit of hell of Earth

~sam l.

Wow what a powerful poem with so much feelings and sadness and i loved it all.You did a fantastic job .,.,

Wow. I th9ink it is great! The use of language is rich and wonderful! I like the repetitive beginning of each stanza!