Tyring to get some thoughts on this poem, what do you think?

Question:With a thrust & hand full of hair
He yells
" Look at my face, i did this to you"
Passion revolves around his eyes

Blood racing to the brain
Leaking out of her cut
Bruising her
Scaring this gift of love

Sitting there he see's his reflection in his knife
Oh what a site
Feeling his power in her cries
Taking what he wants
When he wants
Releasing demons
Into the wide open
Watching them dance around the room
Giving instructions

Every pirouette delivers a slash to her skin
Blood drops scatter on the wall,
Spreading across the bed sheets
Forming pentagrams in his favor

She raises her head
She has to look
As she see's another slash kissing her skin
Opening her flesh
"Where's God "
She yells inside of her mind
At the same moment he gets right in her face
" Wake up "
"Your in this alone "
He licks the blood off of the blade
Then he opens her throat in sacrifice
As the demons begin their feast

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: With a thrust & hand full of hair
He yells
" Look at my face, i did this to you"
Passion revolves around his eyes

Blood racing to the brain
Leaking out of her cut
Bruising her
Scaring this gift of love

Sitting there he see's his reflection in his knife
Oh what a site
Feeling his power in her cries
Taking what he wants
When he wants
Releasing demons
Into the wide open
Watching them dance around the room
Giving instructions

Every pirouette delivers a slash to her skin
Blood drops scatter on the wall,
Spreading across the bed sheets
Forming pentagrams in his favor

She raises her head
She has to look
As she see's another slash kissing her skin
Opening her flesh
"Where's God "
She yells inside of her mind
At the same moment he gets right in her face
" Wake up "
"Your in this alone "
He licks the blood off of the blade
Then he opens her throat in sacrifice
As the demons begin their feast

Dark and sickening to the stomach but I see your soul bleeds onto the page. you want people to see that you are not this evil but you can see this around you... I am assuming all this from the words I read.

I love the darkness and imagery that comes into play as the words flow through my eyes to my mind... I read more then words but I read images that only this poem could bring... Well done, never stop getting better.

Wow really cool poem and i loved it a lot.You brought the words to life with all the darkness of the poem..

It's great