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Question:I see her
So beautiful
Her walk is elegant
Her smile is uplifting
Her smell is hypnotizing
And her eyes
Oh her eyes
They cast a spell on me
Shall I speak
...................
I will do it
*stunned*
Beauty?
I think not!
Upon hearing her,
Words of wisdom
Scratch that
Words of ignorance
The beauty she once had
Decays
I am truly amazed
How words can turn beauty
Into ugliness
In a matter of 13 words

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I see her
So beautiful
Her walk is elegant
Her smile is uplifting
Her smell is hypnotizing
And her eyes
Oh her eyes
They cast a spell on me
Shall I speak
...................
I will do it
*stunned*
Beauty?
I think not!
Upon hearing her,
Words of wisdom
Scratch that
Words of ignorance
The beauty she once had
Decays
I am truly amazed
How words can turn beauty
Into ugliness
In a matter of 13 words

I see him
So handsome
He walks with confidence
He is sophisticated
Almost regal
And his lips
Oh his lips
They are incredible
Will he speak?
....................
He just might
“Are those t.itties real?”
Sophisticated?
I think not!
Upon hearing him
I hurled the following words
“Listen you ignorant son of a ******,
Who do you think you are?”
*stunned*
I am truly amazed
How words can turn fantasy
Into reality
In a matter of 4 words

Temari

wow
what
a
nice
word
so
beauty
and
passion
i
would
love
to
re-read
again!!!!

I absolutely love this. It's great to hear a guy say that it's more than just looks that matter. This is one of those poems that makes women everywhere feel good about themselves.

So, the thirteen words were? Did you give her the benefit of the doubt and stay around for the twelth and thirteenth words? I liked the poem, my only thought is the word ugliness seemed very harsh, but that is me.

To a poet the word is more powerful than physical beauty. An excellent expression of the concept.

I am blown away and when I began to read this I did not expect to be. I try not to take things at first glance and with this, I am sure glade I didn't. I think that it beginning the way it does lends to the overall feel of the piece and gives the ending a more powerful "BOOM!"

Well done, but never stop trying to improve. The moment you think you have something is the moment you lose it and slip into the world of ego.