I wrote this in high school how does it sound?

Question:Packing memories of the good time we shared
Saying goodbye to the friends who cared.
I'm leaving today from the place that i know.
I don't want to leave I don't want to go!

Boarding the plane with tears in my eyes
I sat in my seat and prepared to fly.
Landing with fear deep down in my heart
One life has just finished so a new life can start.

We came to our house soon to be my home
In a new town, a new world all alone.
Unlike the school i went to before
Friends i had none but bullies galore!
The end of the day I ran home to my room
Crying my eyes out, wishing life would end soon!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Packing memories of the good time we shared
Saying goodbye to the friends who cared.
I'm leaving today from the place that i know.
I don't want to leave I don't want to go!

Boarding the plane with tears in my eyes
I sat in my seat and prepared to fly.
Landing with fear deep down in my heart
One life has just finished so a new life can start.

We came to our house soon to be my home
In a new town, a new world all alone.
Unlike the school i went to before
Friends i had none but bullies galore!
The end of the day I ran home to my room
Crying my eyes out, wishing life would end soon!

I like this poem. It really talks about what life is all about. It's like you rank up but then you end up at the bottom of the food chain again. And if bullies are really bullying you then ignore them. Your opinions about yourself are the ONLY ones that DO matter!! The rhyming parts I REALLY enjoyed :) .You are a great poet and I think you should continue to do so.

its pretty good

that was adorable :)

Its awesome dude, if the flow was better it would be a good rap, but you executed the feeling perfectly.

Sounds like me when I had to change schools. I know how that feels. It's real.

I like this poem, it is very real. I know people who have gone through something like this.

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I like it.
Good detail.
Nice work:)

HELLO JAZZ ITS AMANDA!!! :D
love it! :D