Poem comment?

Question:I didn’t think
I could get over
My heart did sink
I lost my lover

But now you are here
And I don’t know how
To make it clear
I want you now

You are a wind in the door
Slamming it on my past
How could I want more
I wish this would always last.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I didn’t think
I could get over
My heart did sink
I lost my lover

But now you are here
And I don’t know how
To make it clear
I want you now

You are a wind in the door
Slamming it on my past
How could I want more
I wish this would always last.

it's very good, seems like you really love this person. it shows the emotion, but if you were to make it longer i would recommend adding some more imagery, and metaphors and such.

I love it...

Add somemore emotion. Maybe it's just me, but poems should usually be pretty intense and full of feeling. Lots and lots of description.

This is a very basic poem that expresses emotions but its hardly deep. The first two lines of the last verse are slightly more perceptive.

It's a good start. It sounds like there should be more coming afterwards. I like the first part.

Dude, i don't get how you write this stuff at 13, cause its just amazing.
I've read all your poems that you have posted and stared all of em i think.

Absolutely great work!