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Position:Home>Poetry> Another poem... i just feel like writing today... comment?Question:I felt so alone When I wasn’t with you I wish I had known I was being used I sit and sigh With no one around As time flies by I make no sound I have no one beside No one like you But instead you lied Lied and abused Now I feel dead With out a friend All the things you said Its already the end… Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I felt so alone When I wasn’t with you I wish I had known I was being used I sit and sigh With no one around As time flies by I make no sound I have no one beside No one like you But instead you lied Lied and abused Now I feel dead With out a friend All the things you said Its already the end… Sw33t, I see nothing wrong with this, a fine work indeed <3 ain't wrong in feeling "dead" my friend @)~>~ awww. i love it. its sweet. i also write poems It is rather shallow. It lacks substance. Your rhyme schemes are nice, but variety would enhance the poem. Thats lovely. I can totally relate Excellente' The last stanza doesn't work. I feel dead? I think you mean hollow. Dead is nothingness which is different. So there! (I'm smar-ter than you-hoo!) :) |