Not original... but its a poem... comment?

Question:When you wish upon a star
Makes no difference who you are
But only if you could see
Maybe just maybe we could be

But now I know
You see straight through me
I wish you would show
It’s not just him you see.

Now I wish upon a star
But I know I can’t change who you are
I know now that it is true
I can’t go on without thinking of you

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: When you wish upon a star
Makes no difference who you are
But only if you could see
Maybe just maybe we could be

But now I know
You see straight through me
I wish you would show
It’s not just him you see.

Now I wish upon a star
But I know I can’t change who you are
I know now that it is true
I can’t go on without thinking of you

bland, boring, does not provoke the heart to feel what the writer wants you to feel. Compostion is loose.

well i think its good. i dnt think its boring or anything

thats more of a song

The music which was put to is nice, but the words are so...so...1930's-ish.