I just wrote this poem... please comment...?

Question:Sometimes it rains
Sometimes it pours
Sometimes the pain
Closes all doors

One day without you
Just goes to waste
I’m feeling so blue
You cant be replaced

My dreams are of days
When we were together
I can’t stop and gaze
Without rain in the weather

I wish you could see
my life is so bland
I wish we could be
But I cant change who I am.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Sometimes it rains
Sometimes it pours
Sometimes the pain
Closes all doors

One day without you
Just goes to waste
I’m feeling so blue
You cant be replaced

My dreams are of days
When we were together
I can’t stop and gaze
Without rain in the weather

I wish you could see
my life is so bland
I wish we could be
But I cant change who I am.

Oh my goodness that is so sweet and very sad..You rhyme very well (much better than me) Though I find that trying to rhyme a poem can make it be perceived at trite at times..but you've managed to sound genuine. The last two lines got to me though I don't know why...It's funny I actually gasped...Kudos :)

i love it:)your very talented

That is Beautiful! Keep up the good work!

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not bad.

i liked it

Very good write. I would just change the word Sometimes. It is ok to use Sometimes, but not 3 times. Maybe just use the word Sometimes one time. :)

Keep writing :)

Poetry is like art and so subjective.

I personally like it.

Keep it up, you will get better as you write more and more poetry.

dude that i off the hook really

I like your poem. It's so romantic.

Save some skills for the other people. Like me. Haahaha. :)

its really good!
i really like the endd.
keep up the good writing!! lol :]

Awwww...What a good poem. Good use of words. I like it alot. Most of the other poems i open up are a waste of time ...but not THiS one. =D

Continue to write...you're good at it.
x

Nice

that is such a nice poem its so sweet lol you have a real talent u should like write more there its realy good. that girl ur talking about is realy lucky lol.

That's so great! I want to hear more! Keep it up and get your work out there if you're really interested in doing something like this for your life. If you can just write something like that now, you could go far.

its good. keep writng more poems.

WoW thats really good. :)

wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
that all i can said who ever came up with that needs a award okay i think it is soooooooooooo wonderful you make wonder what life is really all about that made my day really thanks

I liked it. Its very honest and sad.

wow.. i dont like reading poems...

in fact.. ive gone on the record here at y/a of stating that if it doesnt attract me in the first few lines, i wont read it...

well done.

that is the best poem i have seen on yahoo answers

wow,
Sometimes it rains
sometimes it pours
sometimes the pain
close the doors
we don't want rain inside
One day without you
Just goes to waste
I would interpret this as
I would miss
and feeling sad
No amount of rain will replace your friend
feeling blue is like rain come from the heart
I see you would be happy with your friend

When a poem is bland I think it's mean to say that it's so good just to be nice. There nothing clever about this poem. It's says nothing new and does not ignite the imagination. It's plain lukewarm oatmeal and nothing more. In order to grow one must take risks and stray occasionally from their warm safe place into the unknown.